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here is the link to the google doc of my revised and final draft of my literacy narrative:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NKp07Ci7rc2qmh6z6KEi3A3cL5UCGa7V6TJymhu643w/edit
Revision and Reflection:
This class has helped me realize that one of the things that I struggle with most in my writing is the length of my paragraphs. I often have a hard time breaking up paragraphs and separating my thoughts, and I think I can attribute this to the lengthier paragraphs that I feel are required of me when I write papers for English classes where I have to engage with critical theory from theorists such as Derrida, Foucault, and Marx. I often need to write long paragraphs explaining what these theorists are saying, and then add my own analysis. But I have realized that it is easier for me, and my readers, to have shorter paragraphs because I think it is easy to fall of track and stop paying attention when paragraphs become too long. So for this revision, I tried to break up a lot of my paragraphs and make the topic sentences more concise and clear.
Another revision that I made was to stop making such broad, generalized, grand claims. I also have a tendency to do this–and in one of my drafts of this paper, I wrote something about how I don’t know “anything” about math. This is simply not true. I do know some things about math, just not that much. So I reread my narrative and tried to clarify some of these grand and overarching claims, and my reflection on these revisions is that I feel as though I am being more honest about myself and my abilities when I say that I know “some things” about math, rather than nothing at all.
I feel good about these revisions because it is MY narrative, and all of the information that I write should be honest and clear, and I feel that being honest with my work and my faults when writing makes me a better writer, and more capable of communicating with my audience.
